Week 6 (Mythic Magic in My Stories)
Part one:
Ordinary world - a teenage girl who lives in a regular city and goes to school
Call to adventure - finds a little girl in an alley who’s “lost”
Refusal of the call - either doesn’t want to help her or doesn’t know how to help her
Meeting the mentor - the “mentor” is an old woman that they run into. They don’t recognize her at first, but figure out that she’s the girl’s aunt who had gone missing a long time ago.
Crossing the threshold - have to leave the city because the police are after her and her parents are looking for her
Tests, Allies, Enemies - this girl has special powers that she has to learn how to use, they have to make it to her aunt’s house
Approach to the inmost cave - they come face to face with the police and others trying to find them.
Supreme ordeal - nearly captured, but they somehow defeat them.
Reward - the girl is finally safe
The road back - they return back to the city
Resurrection - return without her parents
Elixir - they live with the aunt who keeps them safe
Part two:
The last bell of the day rang, and I quickly threw my backpack on and made my way out the classroom door. The school day was finally over and I could go home for the weekend! I was halfway outside when I realized that I forgot my jacket. It was probably negative ten degrees outside, I didn’t want to walk out in a short-sleeve shirt.
I grabbed my bike and started off towards my house, the cold air freezing my face as I picked up speed. After only a few minutes, my hands were numb, despite the gloves I wore, and my cheeks started burning.
I was almost at my house when I stopped. The world spun around me as I struggled to regain my balance. My chest hurt from breathing in the cold air. As much as I wanted to go back home, it was like something was stopping me. I didn’t feel like going back and seeing my parents. I didn’t want to face them right now. I turned my bike around and headed towards the record store. It was the only other place I knew to go.
The cold had warmed me up so much that I no longer felt it. It was as if it was spring again, and I was riding to go meet my friends somewhere. I missed the warm weather.
I finally came across the record store, which was at least a few miles from my house. I parked my bike in front of it, and was about to go inside, when I noticed a trail of smoke that came from the alley next to it. It could’ve just been someone’s breath, I supposed, but it looked like cigarette smoke, and there wasn’t anyone around here. I turned the corner to see if anyone was there, but I didn’t see anyone smoking. The only person was a little girl who sat curled-up in a ball, her knees glued to her forehead.
I stared at the girl, not knowing if I should do anything. I had never been good with little kids, I didn’t know how to deal with them. Why did I even come here by myself? I should’ve just let someone else find her.
Eventually, though, I decided to talk to her anyway. “Hello?” I asked into the alley.
The girl’s head popped up for a second, but she either didn’t notice me, or didn’t care, and she returned to resting it on her knees.
I walked closer to her, cautiously, as if she were a wild animal. I was kind of scared of her because something was definitely wrong. “Are you okay?” I asked. I was only a few feet away from her.
She finally looked up at me. The girl had messy blonde hair and bright red cheeks streaked with tears. She must’ve been crying for a long time. How long had she been here? Should I tell someone?
“Why are you here?” I tried again.
“I ran away,” she said finally.
“Why?”
“Because...my mom and dad. I don’t know.”
I didn’t want to press her for questions, so I sat down next to her in the alley, on the cold ground, against a brick wall. “Do you need help?”
She shook her head.
I didn’t want to argue with her. It wasn’t worth it to argue with a little kid. “Okay,” I said, “do you want to come into the store with me?”
Ordinary world - a teenage girl who lives in a regular city and goes to school
Call to adventure - finds a little girl in an alley who’s “lost”
Refusal of the call - either doesn’t want to help her or doesn’t know how to help her
Meeting the mentor - the “mentor” is an old woman that they run into. They don’t recognize her at first, but figure out that she’s the girl’s aunt who had gone missing a long time ago.
Crossing the threshold - have to leave the city because the police are after her and her parents are looking for her
Tests, Allies, Enemies - this girl has special powers that she has to learn how to use, they have to make it to her aunt’s house
Approach to the inmost cave - they come face to face with the police and others trying to find them.
Supreme ordeal - nearly captured, but they somehow defeat them.
Reward - the girl is finally safe
The road back - they return back to the city
Resurrection - return without her parents
Elixir - they live with the aunt who keeps them safe
Part two:
The last bell of the day rang, and I quickly threw my backpack on and made my way out the classroom door. The school day was finally over and I could go home for the weekend! I was halfway outside when I realized that I forgot my jacket. It was probably negative ten degrees outside, I didn’t want to walk out in a short-sleeve shirt.
I grabbed my bike and started off towards my house, the cold air freezing my face as I picked up speed. After only a few minutes, my hands were numb, despite the gloves I wore, and my cheeks started burning.
I was almost at my house when I stopped. The world spun around me as I struggled to regain my balance. My chest hurt from breathing in the cold air. As much as I wanted to go back home, it was like something was stopping me. I didn’t feel like going back and seeing my parents. I didn’t want to face them right now. I turned my bike around and headed towards the record store. It was the only other place I knew to go.
The cold had warmed me up so much that I no longer felt it. It was as if it was spring again, and I was riding to go meet my friends somewhere. I missed the warm weather.
I finally came across the record store, which was at least a few miles from my house. I parked my bike in front of it, and was about to go inside, when I noticed a trail of smoke that came from the alley next to it. It could’ve just been someone’s breath, I supposed, but it looked like cigarette smoke, and there wasn’t anyone around here. I turned the corner to see if anyone was there, but I didn’t see anyone smoking. The only person was a little girl who sat curled-up in a ball, her knees glued to her forehead.
I stared at the girl, not knowing if I should do anything. I had never been good with little kids, I didn’t know how to deal with them. Why did I even come here by myself? I should’ve just let someone else find her.
Eventually, though, I decided to talk to her anyway. “Hello?” I asked into the alley.
The girl’s head popped up for a second, but she either didn’t notice me, or didn’t care, and she returned to resting it on her knees.
I walked closer to her, cautiously, as if she were a wild animal. I was kind of scared of her because something was definitely wrong. “Are you okay?” I asked. I was only a few feet away from her.
She finally looked up at me. The girl had messy blonde hair and bright red cheeks streaked with tears. She must’ve been crying for a long time. How long had she been here? Should I tell someone?
“Why are you here?” I tried again.
“I ran away,” she said finally.
“Why?”
“Because...my mom and dad. I don’t know.”
I didn’t want to press her for questions, so I sat down next to her in the alley, on the cold ground, against a brick wall. “Do you need help?”
She shook her head.
I didn’t want to argue with her. It wasn’t worth it to argue with a little kid. “Okay,” I said, “do you want to come into the store with me?”
Well Sarah,
ReplyDeleteI must say, i am rather impressed by how neatly well you followed the mythic structure of your story by having an Ordinary World, then a Call to adventure, then a Refusal to the call, and so forth.
I also like how you put the start of your mythic structures into a full intro to the story itself, like you didn't go though all the different structures, but you covered enough to get the reader intrigued.